What lies beneath

What lies beneath,

Stays hidden from the world around.

Remains unseen from the naked eye.

Walls are built thick and sky-high.

None can penetrate through.

Darkness is both a friend and enemy.

During the harsh times,

It serves as a sanctuary.

But again, it can be a world

Of nightmares.

Eyes swollen and bloodshot from crying.

Nose red from sniffing.

Cheeks pale with no colour visible.

Lips quivered trying to remain in control .

Hands clenched into fists.

Nails dug into palms.

Blood was drawn but,

No heed was paid.

To the naked eye, all

Seems flawless.

But then what really is the definition of flawless…..

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6 thoughts on “What lies beneath

  1. This is such a great piece. I honestly can see the efforts which you have done so effortlessly. Oh well, I can’t really define flawless except how this particular of your writing is! It has got depth and it is eye-opening in a way. It is one of those very little things that we over look or choose to overlook. My favorite of them all was this:
    “Hands clenched into fists.

    Nails dug into palms.

    Blood was drawn but,

    No heed was paid.”

    This is so beautifully described that :’) I don’t really have words to describe. It just works out so perfectly and the poetry’s tone is so in sync in it. When you start your poem, it feels as if what is hidden are meant to be hidden and I thought it might be a personality that you are talking about that is often unseen, a phase unheard of! But then you describe how hurt a person can be but yet put on a happy face and bury that utter sadness and conceal it in veins. This other lines are so very deep and complementing as well:
    “Darkness is both a friend and enemy.

    During the harsh times,

    It serves as a sanctuary.

    But again, it can be a world

    Of nightmares.”

    These lines are so very mature. It shows how much you have grown as a person. It recognizes and acknowledges the both sides of a coin and somehow make peace with it…at the same time, it imitates how something that is hidden like a “dark secret” can also be like a coin with two sides. Very interestingly written and expressed. Love it! Great job.

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    1. Thank you so much! 😀 I really appreciate your opinions on my writing :’) I can’t thank you enough to be honest …… your comments really do help put myself in ease because I’m always uncertain about how well I have written…. thanks a lot for the motivation ^_^

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